This has become the highlight of my week, I'm not kidding you. I feel like those young boys, at the beginning of the sci-fi writing era, eagerly awaiting the next issue of their precious magazine.
And like rucksackjack, I expected a pregnant monster, and wasn't disappointed.
I know you might be less satisfied with this because it's not brimming with humour like usually, but you did a fantastic job nonetheless. You have a brilliant handle on your vocabulary, your characters, and the steady flow of the narration - it really reads as one voice, since you keep up this style marvelously. The story didn't have me rolling on the floor like usually, but it did have me on the edge of my seat, mouth dry and fingers twitching, eager to know what happens next, and that's the mark of really outstanding writing.
I loved how you casually mentioned that the first creature they killed was a male. Excellent technique - like a camera switching - and I was sweating profusely at this point. So, in the words of Mole in "Atlantis": "I'm soo excited!!"
Am I a bit weird for rooting for the mother monster, though? She was a pregnant creature, after all, icky undulating tentacles or not (that description was fantastic in its detail, by the way.) Maybe it would've been different if Reuben and company had been trapped instead (which already shows how much I love these characters, how much they've come alive in my head.)
And there are bits and pieces of humour nonetheless, all the more precious for their rarity.
On the other hand, he recalled an exact count of how many different specimens of brocchinia jaculatrix he had observed during this same period, which may help to illustrate his priorities. *SNORT*
A gentleman was polite, always made time for tea, and didn't abandon another gentleman to be eaten by something dreadful... I love you, man.
In short: Brilliant work, as I've come to expect nothing less from you. Ya, ya, yaa!
(P.S: Pssst... "Alright. I don’t know how we're going to get them free them
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This is like that moment when your favourite weekly show starts. *SQUEEE*
Date: 2008-09-26 04:51 pm (UTC)And like
I know you might be less satisfied with this because it's not brimming with humour like usually, but you did a fantastic job nonetheless. You have a brilliant handle on your vocabulary, your characters, and the steady flow of the narration - it really reads as one voice, since you keep up this style marvelously. The story didn't have me rolling on the floor like usually, but it did have me on the edge of my seat, mouth dry and fingers twitching, eager to know what happens next, and that's the mark of really outstanding writing.
I loved how you casually mentioned that the first creature they killed was a male. Excellent technique - like a camera switching - and I was sweating profusely at this point.
So, in the words of Mole in "Atlantis": "I'm soo excited!!"
Am I a bit weird for rooting for the mother monster, though? She was a pregnant creature, after all, icky undulating tentacles or not (that description was fantastic in its detail, by the way.) Maybe it would've been different if Reuben and company had been trapped instead (which already shows how much I love these characters, how much they've come alive in my head.)
And there are bits and pieces of humour nonetheless, all the more precious for their rarity.
On the other hand, he recalled an exact count of how many different specimens of brocchinia jaculatrix he had observed during this same period, which may help to illustrate his priorities.
*SNORT*
A gentleman was polite, always made time for tea, and didn't abandon another gentleman to be eaten by something dreadful...
I love you, man.
In short: Brilliant work, as I've come to expect nothing less from you. Ya, ya, yaa!
(P.S: Pssst...
"Alright. I don’t know how we're going to get them free them
Lose one of those ;))